What went well
Love the fact it's all set in one day - we see day into night - the journey
Some nice shots
Love the slow mo of Kierann walking
Lovely shots of them on the swing
Very steady camera movement
Really nice cutting to the beat - fire, fire, fire!
Even better If
Some of the fire shots lack focus - when he is behind the fire - shows different quality
Get rid of the first swing shot - it needs a shot of them swinging on it
Too many shots of Harriet looking at the camera
Cut from from 1.43 - you can see Kierann laughing!
Work on transitions between shots
Feel he needs to throw more into the fire
Why does it go to first person shot - hand held?
The shot with Kierann at the fire in the dark - 3.53 is too long
Add photos of them being thrown into fire at the end
26 marks so far - Proficient
We all feel that this is some really nice feedback in which we will be able to improve upon by the time we have to present it again. However, there are some parts which will be tricky to improve upon. For example, we can easily add transitions between shots to add variety, but to also make sure they fit in the music video, but it would be harder for us to shoot more scenes of Kierann chucking more things in to the fire, and although we do agree with this, there is a chance that we wont be able to do this until the third draft just because last time it took much organisation for us to film those fire shots, and we have already used most of the "bonfire shots" that we need and have.
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